The second draft of your images looks quite good. I like the way the theme is shaping up through the images and the evidence of being alone in a new world. However, the use of some color or more shading may help develop more depth in the images and draw the reader in. Additionally, I would clarify the image of the holographic fire, as this may be confusing to first time viewers. The audio track that you have associated with the draft does vastly aide in setting the plot for the tales. Towards the center, you mention the lack of outside stimuli in the audio. To me, this just seems a bit blunt. I would remove this line and place it in the supporting text rather than using it as an integral part of the audio. This will additionally help you to reach your audio time limit of 30 seconds which you are slightly over. I don’t think any additional material is otherwise needed to complete the audio track, but the essay should include some more development on why the characters are leaving their homeland, adding details to the background that the audio segment provides to set the storyline in place.
The quality of your images is still lacking but the draft of them looks good. The audio track you produced was very descriptive and had a very good futuristic tone to it. The biggest problem I see with this audio file is that it runs over the alloted 30 second time limit. It must be cut down and I suggest removing the part about the planet being on the brink of war and simply speak slightly faster. The essay will need to elaborate on parallels with Chaucer other than the people leaving.
The second draft of your images looks quite good. I like the way the theme is shaping up through the images and the evidence of being alone in a new world. However, the use of some color or more shading may help develop more depth in the images and draw the reader in. Additionally, I would clarify the image of the holographic fire, as this may be confusing to first time viewers. The audio track that you have associated with the draft does vastly aide in setting the plot for the tales. Towards the center, you mention the lack of outside stimuli in the audio. To me, this just seems a bit blunt. I would remove this line and place it in the supporting text rather than using it as an integral part of the audio. This will additionally help you to reach your audio time limit of 30 seconds which you are slightly over. I don’t think any additional material is otherwise needed to complete the audio track, but the essay should include some more development on why the characters are leaving their homeland, adding details to the background that the audio segment provides to set the storyline in place.
ReplyDeleteThe quality of your images is still lacking but the draft of them looks good. The audio track you produced was very descriptive and had a very good futuristic tone to it. The biggest problem I see with this audio file is that it runs over the alloted 30 second time limit. It must be cut down and I suggest removing the part about the planet being on the brink of war and simply speak slightly faster. The essay will need to elaborate on parallels with Chaucer other than the people leaving.
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