The images are very intriguing but the labels and ads on top are very distracting. Your voice over could be a lot better as well. Just write a script to improve that. Also be aware of what you must cut for the final project. I would also like to know what ideas you have for your essay. Try not to make your essay a restatement of your video. Make them compliment each other.
I still feel that you don't need to necessarily make the entrepreneur greedy. It makes it seem to much like you're just trying to find a way to update the pardoner even though we aren't supposed to. Why not focus on the entrepreneur from how he creates jobs for people and treats employees well so that he corresponds better with the merchant?
Has your partner used the Wife of Bath, the Pardoner, and/or the Man of Law as the only source material for his/her character?
We are not allowed to only use one of those three. We can, however, incorporate information about them in our essay, as long as we also bring in other information as well. Yes, obviously I am referring to the pardoner about the greed part. But that is only one of the character traits. I recognize that I obviously need to expand the other parts, as you keep harping on the pardoner bit. I do want to include that part as well, however. I also plan to include gregariousness and other traits that make him seem more businessman-like, and then talk about how the entrepreneur represents everything that the rest of the pilgrims are fleeing, and how he makes them uncomfortable. The whole interaction between the pilgrims and the entrepreneur should be awkward, and his story, from that perspective, has a whole different meaning.
The images are very intriguing but the labels and ads on top are very distracting. Your voice over could be a lot better as well. Just write a script to improve that. Also be aware of what you must cut for the final project. I would also like to know what ideas you have for your essay. Try not to make your essay a restatement of your video. Make them compliment each other.
ReplyDeleteI still feel that you don't need to necessarily make the entrepreneur greedy. It makes it seem to much like you're just trying to find a way to update the pardoner even though we aren't supposed to. Why not focus on the entrepreneur from how he creates jobs for people and treats employees well so that he corresponds better with the merchant?
ReplyDeleteIn the peer review assignment, Ms. Wharton says:
ReplyDeleteHas your partner used the Wife of Bath, the Pardoner, and/or the Man of Law as the only
source material for his/her character?
We are not allowed to only use one of those three. We can, however, incorporate information about them in our essay, as long as we also bring in other information as well. Yes, obviously I am referring to the pardoner about the greed part. But that is only one of the character traits. I recognize that I obviously need to expand the other parts, as you keep harping on the pardoner bit. I do want to include that part as well, however. I also plan to include gregariousness and other traits that make him seem more businessman-like, and then talk about how the entrepreneur represents everything that the rest of the pilgrims are fleeing, and how he makes them uncomfortable. The whole interaction between the pilgrims and the entrepreneur should be awkward, and his story, from that perspective, has a whole different meaning.